Feedback for Kenzi

Feedback for Kenzi

  • Really love the voice that Q has, the overthinking is very relatable for me
  • The imagery was SUPER well done
  • Pg 2, paragraph 3 “They’re a lot taller than me…talking to the dog.” I’d watch for run-ons. This part seems like it could be split up into a couple of sentences to be easier to read
  • Make sure to watch for tenses (seemed to switch a little between past and present tense throughout the story)
  • Perhaps make the passage of time a bit more clear, adds more tension with the whole “mom’s gonna be mad at me for being out for so long” vibes
  • “Thank You Space Rocks” would be a fantastic title (as Jesse said in class)
  • Perhaps go more into Sunny’s background to understand their characterization a bit more

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