- Really love the voice that Q has, the overthinking is very relatable for me
- The imagery was SUPER well done
- Pg 2, paragraph 3 “They’re a lot taller than me…talking to the dog.” I’d watch for run-ons. This part seems like it could be split up into a couple of sentences to be easier to read
- Make sure to watch for tenses (seemed to switch a little between past and present tense throughout the story)
- Perhaps make the passage of time a bit more clear, adds more tension with the whole “mom’s gonna be mad at me for being out for so long” vibes
- “Thank You Space Rocks” would be a fantastic title (as Jesse said in class)
- Perhaps go more into Sunny’s background to understand their characterization a bit more
