- The imagery in your story is absolutely amazing, I’m OBSESSED
- The way you portray the hemming and hawing she is going through in her mind is very well done
- Page 3 first para “The answer is in the painting if I can only dare picture the image” one of my fav lines in your story (there are so many great lines, though)
- At points, it feels like the story is dragging a little bit. Perhaps cut out some of the inner monologue as it gets a bit repetitive and while the imagery is lovely (as I said, I am indeed obsessed with it) it may be a bit unnecessary
- Your final line is a great ender. The whole story, gravity has been the enemy, the villain. In the end, gravity is the comfort for the journey down.
