- I like how you gave the background in the beginning, it didn’t drag on or distract from the main plot and it gave us necessary info to understand the rest of the story
- The back and forth in the main character’s mind in the beginning is very believable. On the one hand, he wants to save Johnny, on the other hand, his self-preservation is screaming at him to turn back
- Pg 3 last paragraph leading into page 4 “The distant trees looked as if they were creating an archway into the dark depths. It was a strangely welcoming sight, it was as if something inside of me was being drawn to that part of the woods. It felt like I was being welcomed home.” I love these lines, just one example of the amazing imagery you have
- If he had learned the secrets of the universe from the meteor, shouldn’t he have been expecting the people in the trees? Or did he forget the knowledge as soon as it passed into his brain?
- I feel like there could be so much more for each scene, like each progression that was made was well written but I still wanted more to be discovered about everything that was happening
- I love the ending, it makes me think about everything that previously happened in the story. Was it all in his head? Was the monster (alien?) making him act this way? Was it the meteor?
- In conclusion this needs to be made into a movie, please and thank you
