- Right off the bat, the imagery is amazing. The way you describe things is so beautiful it truly does paint a picture right in my mind
- I can’t decide if Derek’s obsession with this woman is sweet or creepy (low key giving Joe from “You” vibes)
- You really captures what it’s like to be an introvert in the city. The juxtaposition of the ever changing, constantly moving city against the solitary and stagnant Derek is done so well
- I like how you mentioned that the woman was clearly conscious of looking good and well presented and then you mentioned how Mia was also clearly dressed to impress
- “Green Sweater” would be a good title for the story
- I think Al should have a bite more of a role in the story. I feels like he was introduced but he was never really utilized even though you alluded to Mia getting the balloon by him
- Is Derek’s obsession with people because as an artist he likes to romanticize all aspects of life?
