- I really appreciate the way the narrator sees the world. They say they aren’t poetic like their wife, yet the way they view things can only be described as poetic
- I think you portrayed their love very, very well. It isn’t just a flat overarching kind of love, it’s the kind thats deep and fluid and real
- THE ENDING!!!! OUCH, MY HEART!!!!
- You have some lines that are absolutely beautiful! One of my favorites has got to be pg 5 last paragraph “You were always someone. You were just waiting to be my someone.”
- Perhaps vary the sentence structure a bit. A lot of them start with “I” which kinda bogs down the flow
- I understand why you might have chosen to keep the final paragraph short, because with Grace gone so was the narrator, however I am a glutton for sadness and heartbreak so I do wish we could get a tad bit more of the feelings that he was going through
- I also think it would be cool to have some of Grace’s POV. I don’t think it’s necessary for the story but I think it would be very illuminating to see some of her guilt perhaps
