- I absolutely love your prose. The way you write reads so beautifully and lyrical
- I love Mystic. Such a good setting!
- Pg 2 para 2 “She has never opened up to me about the pain she endures because of it. I leave it that way because I know she does not want me to know. She seems happy enough, so I don’t worry.” Let her keep the facade of the sun even though she’s cloudy inside?
- I love the dynamic of the two characters. They are seemingly polar opposites, yet they fit together perfectly
- I appreciate that we get both characters’ POV
- I’m not sure how to feel about the ending. The final two paragraphs from Devyn’s POV almost seem unnecessary. The first paragraph of the two is repeated form earlier in the story and then the concluding paragraph, while it does encompass his feelings about Winter, seems to be an unsatisfactory way to end the story. I almost think the story should end at pg 7 para 1 with Devyn’s POV and the reader having to interpret what his facing of the ocean in order to find Winter meant for themselves
