- I think you captured the guilt that a lot of people with depression experience. It can be really hard to not feel like a burden all the time
- I almost wish we could have some perspective that isn’t all Lou. Like maybe get a feel for how the kids handle or understand the situation
- The switches from present time to memories can get a little confusing and kind of messes with the flow of the story
- I feel like this story may be a wee bit too long if you were to have it double spaced
- I like the tie back with the slug
- I think your imagery is super well done
- My favorite lines are pg 9 para 2ish ” Why wouldn’t you want to be a dragon? It asks. Why shouldn’t you feel that rage? Did you not feel powerful? It isn’t me. I reply. I need to be a mother. I need to be a person. I can’t fall apart like that again. Not again.” I love how Lou was able to overcome her depression in order to be the mother she yearns to be again
