- The way you describe everything is amazing. I could really envision the kitchen and all the sensory aspects that come with it
- Trevor, as a character, is very believable. I think we can all relate to the obsessive nature of having a crush and then the subsequent jealousy that arises when they get or give attention to anyone but you
- One of my favorite lines that you have is pg 5 para 4 “If cooking doesn’t work out for me, I’d gladly be a receptacle for any and every thought Jack has whether it was stupid or funny or complimentary. I would take anything he would give me.” Again, I just feel like that is such a relatable sentiment and I love it
- I think some of the culinary jargon bogs down the flow
- I also think, even though I am obsessed with your imagery, perhaps include less description of the kitchen and how much Trevor loves it. At first it is so lovely and makes the setting known and almost tangible in one’s mind, but after a couple similar descriptions it gets a little repetitive
