- I like the contrast between Samantha and her mother. When they are both together they really show how different their ways of thinking and being are. The contrast is made even stronger when you talk about how close Samantha was with her father
- Are you planning on continuing the story or leaving it off on a cliffhanger? I feel like perhaps you have some more to explore in regard to the man she killed
- I think maybe you could flesh out the week between the killing and when the police show up. Then we would be able to see more into Samantha’s mind and all the mental turmoil causing her to seclude herself
- One part in particular that I really think you did well was pg 3 para 2 ” The sound of his ear-piercing scream of pain never leaving my mind as I begin to refill the hole with the ruined dirt. I collapse to the ground once I’m all finished. I couldn’t move. It’s like my body went paralyzed.” These lines presented such good imagery for Samantha and hwo she was feeling in the moment
