- Right off the bat, I am kinda obsessed with how pessimistic the narrator is. I am hoping for pessimism to optimism arc
- Pg 2 second to last para: Is it realistic that he would be able to guess all of that simply by crashing into this girl? Seems a wee bit too spot on
- Pg 3 para 2 “Brutally honest, and don’t give a single fuck about what anyone thinks of you, which is either one of your only redeeming qualities, or the single worst thing about you.” I love this line!
- Harrison is quite the oddly lovable character
- HE HAD A GIRLFRIEND? so sad, I was hoping that Bree was going to get some action
- I love your concluding lines
- I feel like Carmen should be jealous of Bree always hanging out with her boyfriend. I am getting a little bit of a clingy codependent vibe from Bree. It could be interesting to delve into Carmen’s true thoughts and not just “omg you’re so great let’s be besties”
