- I love the title of the story, I think it fits it really well
- Your prose is amazing, it makes reading the story enjoyable despite the bitter-sweetness of it
- Pg 3 para 1 “Are you kidding me?” Jamie smugly rebutted, “I thought everyone loved Chainsawctopus! I mean, an octopus with chainsaws on its arms terrorizing a small town? Who else has the genius to come up with something like that.” Good comedic relief line, I love it. Also, 10/10 would watch Chainsawctopus
- Love the little time jump symbols
- How was Jamie able to run after her leg was crushed by rubble that Will could just barely move using all of his strength?
- Is the smoking why Jamie has cancer???
- The ending is a little bit confusing timeline-wise however it was very emotional and very well done nonetheless
