The workshop for my second story went very well I think. Lots of people enjoyed the story and had very few critiques of it. The biggest critiques I got were the believability of the speed at which Billy and Violet took their relationship and the wrap-up for my story. I kind of understand how some people may have been iffy on the relationship speed but considering the timeline I personally don’t think they took things too quickly. I think it is just hard for people to not take modern day social norms and apply them to a different time period. I do agree that my ending was rushed, though. I kind of assumed that I was going to get that critique during the workshop. I also got a critique saying that it was a good story but needs something to set it apart from similar stories regarding dementia/Alzheimer’s and romance stories. I can also see why I got this critique but the majority of people didn’t agree with that sentiment and I have to say I think my story was not too similar to other ones in the same vein of stories. If I were to continue on with this story I would definitely extend the ending a bit. I am not sure exactly how I would do it but I think it would be interesting to incorporate another very emotionally charged paragraph from Billy’s feelings on losing Violet as some people suggested. I also think I would include some more of Billy and Violet’s relationship pre-diagnosis.