- Page 1 para 2, perhaps this could be split into a couple of sentences for a smoother and easier read
- Love the way you have written in the mythical elements like they just belong in the story and not like they’re just plopped in for wow factor
- The way Oliver’s anxiety is written is very relatable and believable
- Page 5, perhaps you could make the switch between Oliver’s POV and Isaac’s POV a bit more clear
- Will you be adding on to the story and delving into the date? Or just leaving it be where it is?
- The characterizations of Oliver and Isaac are very well done. I like how Isaac is the confident one to Oliver’s worrisome one
