- I really like the conflict that Flo has within herself
- Pg 5, final paragraph: “I never wanted to be the person I had become.” This line really speaks to me, I feel like it shows how Flo is really critical of how she feels, yet she is following her heart despite that.
- I think you did a really great job with the characterizations of the two main characters. Flo is head over heels for Lincoln but is still trying to be reserved about it and Lincoln is fighting his feelings for Flo while getting lost in the habit of a long term relationship. It is easy to relate to both characters.
- One suggestion is to try to vary the sentence structure in the first paragraph. It sounds a little stilted (which might just be a to convey the inebriation that Flo is dealing with in which case that makes more sense) and a lot of the sentences start with “I”.
