- I really love the way you utilized the descending/indented (idk how to phrase it) lines throughout the story. It’s a super cool choice
- I like the inner monologue that Argyle has, it feels very realistic as to how one might react in the situation
- I like how empathetic Argyle is to the ants, especially how it ties in with how she feels about herself. Perhaps she see’s herself as an ant in a way? Or are the ants her way of having control when her life is so out of control?
- I loved how in the end she knew what she had to do despite every bone in her body telling her it was bad. Sometimes we have to do things we don’t want to do or we are scared to do but its for the best.
- Maybe expand upon her mental state a bit more. Obviously she’s a child so it may not be super complex but having your parents go through a divorce, especially one caused by a parent unwilling to accept their trans kid, is still mentally taxing and harmful to ones mental health.
