We workshopped my short story’s first draft on 10/10/22. I think I got some really good feedback. Going into the workshop, I knew I needed to flesh out the lore a bit more in my story. Writing fantasy is already pretty difficult and I know that it is not everyone’s cup of tea so I knew it was going to be hard to fit in all the necessary background and explanations whilst not taking away from the main plot. I think I need to let go of some of the more frivolous lines and descriptions I have in order to make room for more world building. I also received feedback on the characters and what their purposes are. I think I will definitely need to give Sun a bit more of a personality and really dig in to the conversation she and Moon have in the bedroom. That is, after all, the climax of the story and I definitely rushed it. I also got some good feedback about Hamish. I added him in so I could have the Inn as a setting for the ending and I now see that he can be used to add more drama and mythos to the story. I was thinking of maybe making him as a god or god-like figure. Maybe someone who is fate-like or who knew what the situation was already. I could use him to drive home how important it is that Sun and Moon return to the sky. I also got feedback about the scientific side of the story but I’m not going to really consider it because I do want this to read more like a myth or fable and so if people can believe that Helios brought the day while riding in a chariot then I’m going to say they can suspend their belief for my story as well. What I need to do mainly is flesh out my story. I already have the skeleton laid out well and a little bit of meat but its not a full story yet.